#SOL17: And before that . . .

 

 

deer deer deer

Three deer strolled casually across the road.  I breathed a sigh of relief.  No slamming of brakes.  No sliding bags.  No coffee spilled.  I had already hit my brakes when the rear outer red lights flashed on the car in front of me.

And before that, I had just mentioned to a friend on Voxer that it was either

  0: dark : thirty OR

0: deer : thirty.

I guess I knew the most accurate time.  No rain so deer were moving.  Slow and steady for the next four miles down Deer Alley.

And before that, I had just commented on an open gate:  “Will those cows be out on the road, in the ditch, or behind the house?”

And before that, I was driving down the road en route to the office for my early morning appointment in the tech department.  I was sick and tired of issues with posting my slices 3/4 of the days of the March SOLSC.

And before that, I was racing Mya to the end of the driveway and amazed (daily) by the fact that her four legs regularly beat my four cylinder Vibe.

And before that, I was packing my work bag.

  • a Dell laptop
  • a Chromebook plus
  • an iPad mini
  • a Samsung phone

“Did I have all the necessary devices for the day?” I wondered.

And before that, I was enjoying a peaceful second cup of coffee.  Silence.  Coffee.  Peace. Thinking time.  No noise.  No devices.  No conversation with Mya.

And before that, I was packing my lunch of a granola bar and a turkey and jalapeno cheese wrap.  Plus a travel cup of coffee.

And before that, I was drinking that first cup of coffee for the morning. Savoring the smell of those coffee beans.  Hearing the drip.  And waiting eagerly for that first jolt of caffeine!

And before that, shower . . . shampoo . . . and the rest of the story is not available for print.

Do you always tell a story in chronological order?  

Have you tried reverse order?  

Does it feel uncomfortable to you?  

What structure might you try as an innovation?



Thank you, Betsy, Beth, Deb, Kathleen, Lanny, Lisa, Melanie, and Stacey for this weekly forum and the #SOLSC that runs from March 1 to the 31st. Check out the writers, readers and teachers here.

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15 responses

  1. Fran, I like this structure though I don’t remember ever trying it out. I enjoyed reading about your day told backwards. Glad you didn’t hit those deer–happy for you, your car, and the deer!

    1. Diane,
      Yes – so happy they are still frolicking around perhaps to be seen on another day! ❤

  2. That was so cool– did you write it backwards or write it and then reverse it? I am so curious about your process. Glad you made it through deer alley – love that term!

    Enjoy the rest ( or beginning )of your day!
    Clare

    1. I wrote it backwards (twice) WordPress ate it the first time. But I did read it from the bottom up when I was checking to see if I left any details out!

  3. Nice structure, Fran! I have used this a couple of times in describing the way rooms in my house have changed over time. It wakes up the brain! I like the way you started by taking us right into the moment.

    1. Thanks, Rose. Hmmm…. now I am thinking of other ways to use this. The “sharing-ness of this community is my favorite part!

  4. Love this, happy that a deer did not appear suddenly. There is a picture book you might like (or knowI) titled Previously, by Allan Ahlberg that uses the same format and with fairy tales, very fun, like yours!

  5. I think it is interesting to start at the end and work toward the beginning. Reminds me of the book The October List by Jeffrey Deaver. His first chapter is the end of the story and all subsequent chapters tell what happened before. Not the kind of book for everyone, but I really enjoyed it.

    1. Love Jeffrey Deaver. Will have to look for that one! Nice to have VARIETY!

  6. This is a fun format – I think I’ll try it for a slice on a Tuesday soon! Thanks! I also believe it might be a fun format for my students to use.

  7. That was delightful, and something I’d like to try sometime!

  8. Love this structure, Fran! I’ll have to file it away for next year.

    1. Catherine,
      Always looking for something to help with retelling. Do I pay more attention if I change the order? Still studying that!

  9. Fun structure! I’ve written in a way kind of like it once. I had a post where I used The House that Jack Built as a mentor. It is a fun way to spice up your writing!

    1. Capitalizing on mentor texts is another great way to stretch writing muscles! YES! Thanks, Erin!

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